rate_review Reviews

I\'m not always the best at reviewing, but since you mentioned me twice, I figured I better jump in right away! :)

Good job at bringing in the fact that Ron also had been trained in 5th year. That made me more comfortable with the choice right away. Also, there is nothing wrong with editing the previous chapter and having someone bring that up as a concern and then having Ron mention his training and having Snape test it right there. It would make Ron look much stronger and raise up a notch or 7.

(It\'s your story and it\'s fine as is, but it would be really great to see Snape question Ron\'s ability and then have Ron get at one of Snapes thoughts instead of the other way around right there at the table! I\'m not a cannon Ron fan, but since he gets this juicy role in \'Raven,\' I think it would be funhavehave him really show that group and Snape he\'s ready for this challange! They could break apart and have Snape just look all evil and say, \"I withdraw my protst.\" Then have Ron say, \"Anything seen between us stays between us\" or something like that\" showing Ron is very much a \'man\' since Snape didn\'t get in at all and this hides this fact to the others.)

While I\'m talking about what I\'m not, I\'m also not a Harry/Ginny shipper at all and I loved the wedding in your story, so it shows a great story can take one past his or her preferences.

One thing th tho thought you might use that would make Ron as Lucius believable is jealousy of the Draco/Hermione relationship. Even if he doesn\'t have it anymore, if he looks at them as if that is what he is feeling, that should help him get the right \'touch\' for the dislike of Draco/Hermione together. The other thing I was expecting is for the winner of the Draco/Hermione duel to have to duel Lucius to the death, so that surprised me when that didn\'t happen.

So to answer your question, yes, I\'m very happy with this chapter. You also weren\'t in need a redeeming. I reacted the exact same way when I saw the new chapter, \"YAY! New Raven!\" (And I\'ve added you to my recomended Fics list). I stil love the story!

Oh,
I also wanted to add that I\'m really looking forward to \"That which draws us most.\" Are you going to work on that one when this is finished? It really is a delicious start to a new story!

I\'ve been following this fic for a while now. You\'ve got me hooked lol You are a very talented writer, the characters and the plot is realistic.... well as realistic as you get with harry potter fan fics obviously. Just thought I would tell you that I think your doing an extremely good job so far with this fic. Everytime I come online I always check to see if you have updated and I leave disappointed when you\'ve not lol Please keep up the great quality and keep writing. So thanx for making my boring nights online entertaining :)

Interesting duel. Please continue! :)

Wow. Well that word is an understatement for this fic. Its amazing. The plot is wonderful; its kept me reading solidly for hours. I love how you have built Hermione and Draco\'s personalities and their relationship. PLease please please update soon!!!??? I have to have more, its like a drug. Keep going!!

Lalaith
x

Chapter 21 - Lucius Malfoy: The Return... Ron playing Lucius, now that should be interesting!!! At least he has the okay of the three people that would now if it would work!!!

I think it is so romantic for Harry & Ginny to get married!!! Even though they are young they know that there is very little time before everything could change for them!!!

I am very curious as to what the Gods won\'t let Hermione tell Draco?!? It doesn\'t sound like it was anything that she was very happy about!!!

Looking forward to seeing how Ron does as Lucius as well as how things go in preparation for the battle!!! Til chapter 22, Deb >^..^<

Love the update. I feel sorry for Here whe when she has to leave to go see Voldemort. Terrible thing. Great job!!

Wow! Hermione and Draco!! That\'s a couple I didn\'t think would work and you have taken it and made it beautiful!! Bravo! A thousand times: BRAVO!! I can\'t wait for more!!!

I got sooo confused by that title young lady! I thought he was all dead then I saw that and got all muddled! Okay now though, yay! I hope Ron pulls this off, but I have to say, you ry piy picked one! That\'s going to be interesting, Ron trying to be Lucius! Good luck to him!
Love always
Jen
xXx

Hello!

First of all, I just love this story! Whenever I see it has been updated, I let out a little squeek and say, \"A new Raven!\" and I always read the second to last chapter first so I\'m sure to remember where you left off. Since I read so many other stories, I want to make sure I\'m remembering correctly.

There were some little things in this chapter that just fell flat for me even though I really liked the chapter as a whole (I loved the wedding).

1. I felt like there were just too many \"Buffyisms,\" especially Scoobies.

2. Even with Hermione\'s undercover work, I can\'t picture her saying \'doing the dirty.\'

3. Ed Wood movies don\'t need a modifier. There is only one kind.

4. I just can\'t picture Ron (or anyone for that matter) pulling off being Lucious. First, Voldemort is far too skilled at both Legilimency and Occlumency. Voltemort is just going to be far too familiar with that he senses coming from Lucious\'s mind for anyone to be able to impersonate someone near him with polyjuice. Ron is going to especially going to have trouble. Even if he had 6 months to train for the assignments, he would have to learn how to walk and move and which forks to use and his way around the place and names of people and a million other things... It\'s just not going to be possible.

Good luck with the rest of your story. Even though I had some comments, it really is one of my favorites that I\'m following right now!