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for Come Undone

by Seamasu

person XaloneXalwaysX
schedule November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMGWTF!!!! I was just clicking \"next chapter\" after I finished each and then BAM!! No more \"next chapter\" button!!! I actually shouted \"The hell?!?\" ROFL! You MUST update! I really really like this fic! It\'s extremely anjoyable and amusing, as well as angsty *grin*. It\'s a bit confusing in the dialogue because sometimes you forget to have the name of who\'s actually speaking/thinking. Aside from that, and the strange way that some random words are completely messed up...don\'t ask me how, it\'s GREAT! Update soon! <3
person Anon
schedule March 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Really good story. Very different. Very intense. I like the depth you\'re giving the characters. Why IS harry so moody, anyway?

As others have mentioned, some of your sentences are being cut off. If you copy the text from your word processing program (such as Microsoft Word) and then paste into Note Pad or Word Pad, then paste or upload it here, that might help.
person sallie
schedule February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really Really REALLY like this story and hope you update soon!!!

magic
person Treck
schedule May 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ARRG!
More!
Gimmy More!
person Jerrica
schedule May 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
There are several sentences cut in half throughout the first chapter (perhaps every chapter - I don\'t know), and it makes the story a little hard to follow at times. You might want to fix that.
person Tara
schedule April 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Could you please do me the pleasure of updating?!? It is a great story! I\'m anxious to see what happens next! Your a fantastic writer!
Ciao
person bluehearts
schedule March 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*gap* you mean isn\'t not finished? no... don\'t do this... don\'t do this to me!!!!
person shelleykids
schedule February 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I just found this story last night and love it I hope it see more soon you are a writer lol
person Keikokin
schedule February 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hiya,
I love how this story is developing. Please write the new chapter soon. I love the developement of the characters. But I am wondering are the boys ever going to consummate their bond, and what about Lucius and Voldemort. I HOPE that you aren\'t planning on killing of Harry or Draco. Please email me when you write a new chapter if you can.
Thanks and keep up the MARVY story (Draco in drag - HHHHEEE)
KT
person hi
schedule February 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Some of the lines were cut off. You couldn\'t really tell what they were saying. But other than that, good job!