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November 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
just a quick note about something that jumped out at me in this chapter: I think you want to say \"ante-bellum\" instead of \"anit-bellum.\" I\'m guessing the house was from before the war, not against the war. :)
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November 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I hope you break this awful illness and feel better quickly,obviously for continuation of your story.I like Kathryn with her amazing family around,they seem to be very comfortable,not in their own society,but with outside people-like Severus and Hogwarth`s students-even Severus goes along pretty well,the conversations are amusing and calming as well,despite your story is somewhat dark,I think that the true angst would be too.The development of relationships as between Kate and Severus as between other heroes instantly interesting-makes me impatient,with greed for continuation.Oh,poor Kathryn-between two omniscent and wise yet meddlesome old sweethearts-Marie and Albus-I love the scenes with them-they lighten the story as well as the family interludes.Thank you once more for pictures,I`m glad my collection has been growing,I`d like appreciate every new illustration you`d be so kind to send me.
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November 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I am truely amazed at your ability to update on a daily basis.
Your new summary is better than the last two.
I liked this chapter, lots of little things going on, good for pacing and lead up to other dramatic things.
Poor K, can\'t get enough of her PM. =>
Your new summary is better than the last two.
I liked this chapter, lots of little things going on, good for pacing and lead up to other dramatic things.
Poor K, can\'t get enough of her PM. =>
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November 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
i am so in trouble - i found a typo (gah!), but i\'m not telling where it was. oh well, on to the review:
severus ... cream ... fingers ... lapping ... i need to get hubby home. and soon. he\'s gonna owe you big time!
love the description of the houses -- i got it this time and my eyes crossed with hermione.
i\'m hoping the omniscience of albus and marie proves to be prescience as well. i know there\'s still bumps in the road ahead, but i do so want our lovers to be happy. almost as much as i want you to feel better, chere!
severus ... cream ... fingers ... lapping ... i need to get hubby home. and soon. he\'s gonna owe you big time!
love the description of the houses
i\'m hoping the omniscience of albus and marie proves to be prescience as well. i know there\'s still bumps in the road ahead, but i do so want our lovers to be happy. almost as much as i want you to feel better, chere!
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
told you i\'d save the review for -- well, the review!
from raining students to elves\' battle songs, your imagery makes the story read as vividly as a movie. good touch of lighter moments (\"hi honey, i\'m home\" being a popular phrase at my house after particularly horrific days in rl). kobolds, pixies and elementals all back where they belong, kathryn and students safe at home -- for the moment -- can\'t wait to read the next part of the adventure!
and no, i\'m not saying that just so you don\'t fire me as beta. well, that\'s not the only reason anyway. the main reason is that it\'s all true, damn your talent.
sheesh, and you draw well too. wench!
from raining students to elves\' battle songs, your imagery makes the story read as vividly as a movie. good touch of lighter moments (\"hi honey, i\'m home\" being a popular phrase at my house after particularly horrific days in rl). kobolds, pixies and elementals all back where they belong, kathryn and students safe at home -- for the moment -- can\'t wait to read the next part of the adventure!
and no, i\'m not saying that just so you don\'t fire me as beta. well, that\'s not the only reason anyway. the main reason is that it\'s all true, damn your talent.
sheesh, and you draw well too. wench!
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I was wrong. Harry\'s love is Minuet, not Tali. I really don\'t know why I am so worried over Harry\'s heart in this fic. The Guardian\'s \"gift\" to Harry sounded like doom to me. Well, he\'s Harry and we all worry about him. ve tve the fic. It is the best written one that I have come across. I look forward to more.
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November 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love your story. I have been searching for a really good one for weeks, weeding through this site. I\'m so dumn, I kept skipping over yours because the title didn\'t really catch my eye. I kept seeing it though so I finally checked it out and I can\'t stop reading it. I love all the neat stuff you\'ve added to the general Harry Potter story, it\'s great!! I\'m only on chapter 17 so I\'ve still got plenty more to read. Thanks for the great story.
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November 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
but i will be happy to do it all by myself ~ still, the more the merrier!
yes
yes
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November 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Well- I sent you a detailed review, so what can I add???
The lush detailing and imaginative extension of the magical world keep this interesting. I really like the part oabout the house elves, everyhting regarding the fantasy side is logically explained and tied into the overall story.
For the most part, the kids are kids, with kid feelings, and it adds to he realism of the characters.
I am so happy that you post new material frequently. I will be a faithful fan, although I won\'t always comment.
You already have enough material for anyone with a brain to make inteeligent commentary.
The illustrations youve done arry nry nice.
Keep up the good work
C
The lush detailing and imaginative extension of the magical world keep this interesting. I really like the part oabout the house elves, everyhting regarding the fantasy side is logically explained and tied into the overall story.
For the most part, the kids are kids, with kid feelings, and it adds to he realism of the characters.
I am so happy that you post new material frequently. I will be a faithful fan, although I won\'t always comment.
You already have enough material for anyone with a brain to make inteeligent commentary.
The illustrations youve done arry nry nice.
Keep up the good work
C
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November 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
he he he -- shiv got a cameo! how cool was that? you rock (oooo -- cave, rock -- bad pun alert!)
again (or as always), i love the way you reveal the interplay between characters with dialogue and description. the star wars echo is a valid one that isn\'t exploited well very often; you did it beautifully!
again (or as always), i love the way you reveal the interplay between characters with dialogue and description. the star wars echo is a valid one that isn\'t exploited well very often; you did it beautifully!