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OMG I cant wait for the next chapter i just have to know what happens...ohhh Malfoy is such a cutie...what a brilt plt plan.,..but Severus oh how hot is he...brilliant man..:P Ohhh delicious....

Catherine

Man, this story is so right!!!
I\'m loving very line of it!! keep up the amazing work!!!

more, more, more, more,more!!
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase!
This story is terribly addictive!!!

This is good. Just run through it and check for spelling and grammatical errors.

Very interesting story, but I\'ve got a question. Why doesn\'t it work the other way around? A muggle born boy and a pureblood girl? Just wondering :-D

I just can\'t stop reading this,is stronger than me!!!
I\'m loving it!!

Woah nice chapters...i love them...please continue...im really loving this story...

I have read your other stories and they have very interesting plots, but I think it would be nice if you slowed down your style a bit so that we could see what is going on more. A little more description of people\'s feelings and thoughts would make your stories even more readable. For instance, Severus overhears that he kisses like a goat and he is upset. If you spent a little longer building on that feeling, perhaps thinking about past girlfriends or his time a school, then we could see how vulnerable he is, how h beg beginning to care about her opinion of him, all sorts of things like that - so that when they do hop into bed together we can see how they made the emotional journrom rom mutual antipathy to actually quite liking each other.

And I am sorry to say this but you do seem to make a few spelling mistakes. Have you considered getting a beta reader? I know myself how hard it is to spot mistakes yourself and another pair of eyes might be useful.

Very interesting. : ) I look forward to seeing how this works out.


Kiri

This story is good....please update soon.