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for The Marriage Law

by Witchcraft

person elvirasnape
schedule November 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness I am soooooo happy that you used the name Elvira for lucius\' daughters name. I am soooooo happy!!!!!!! I also must say that I am still loving your story because it is great. I have reread the story twice while I waited for new chapters and everytime I read it I loved it even more. I can\'t wait for the next chapter.
person Deb >^..^<
schedule November 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Too Funny, the big, bad Death Eater fainted;-) Hevereverything works out with your internet!!! Deb >^..^<
person Sharpie\'s Whore
schedule November 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
First of all, it\'s TRAITORS, not traderers.
Secondly, this is drivel. It\'s all right to have all sorts of plot twists, but for heaven\'s sake, SHOW the action, don\'t narrate ithis his isn\'t Reader\'s Digest. Illustrate what is happening rather than just telling it.
And third, why does Hermione have to be this great heir? Could she not just be a normal person, doing extraordinary things? An extraordinary person doing extraordinary things doesn\'t have near the dramatic impact as a normal person rising above and beyond their lot in life.
person Rileywolf133
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I love your story so far, though I love all of your fics, but that\'s not the point. I can\'t wait until the next update, but I also wanted to point out something. You said that they had Advanced Charms with Flitwick, but didn\'t he die in the final battle? Just wanted to point that out to you. Keep up the great work!
person Deb >^..^<
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Will you be telling about Harry\'s wedding & bringing Luna back in? I\'m still curious about Tonks & Moody also? Looking forward to seeing how Sev handles being a daddy*
person Missy Black
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
WOW! Update soon, this is a great HG/SS ficlet.


-Missy Black
person Missy Black
schedule November 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
WOW! Update soon, this is a great HG/SS ficlet.


-Missy Black
person Dark Lady Trinity
schedule October 31, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey! Love this fic, Potter. Hurry up and write a new chapter, you\'ve had me hooked for 3 days, reading this great piece of work. See you later!

Dark Lady Trinity
person Carmella
schedule October 31, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey its good, but can we finish the stroy truly would love to see Snap acting like a father or how he reacts to holding his kids. . .I like ethwhole end of this chapter thing to hehehe
person Kathy
schedule October 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Your story ideas are great, but please be more careful with your spelling! Some of your mistakes were quite funny (my favorite was \"trader\" instead of \"traitor\", but it did distract from an otherwise interesting story to try to find out what you actually meant. I would also like to see you take more time in developing the people in your story. Thanks for the good read.