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Brilliant. Simply brilliant. Everyone in character, backstory enough to justify the developing feelings, and a lovely counterpoint with the chess pieces\' reactions. I don\'t think I\'ve ever read such evoce ane and mature dialogue in a fan fiction before this. Please go on!

Finally chapter two! Don\'t make us wait too long for chapter 3. You had me hooked from chapter 1. I really liked the extra touch with the chess pieces especially the black king and queen retreating back to the box. Waiting for a graphic account of Snape losing his viginity. Well written, keep up the good work.

OMG! This is fabulous! Yes - it is definitely
worth continuing. Your words are so brillantly
placed: their emotions, their thoughts, their
actions, their words - wow!

Hugs,
Corazon

Thank you so much for these lovely chapters! I\'m looking forward to your updates.

Quill, you are truely wonderfull, as is your story! I can\'t wait for more of it!

This is absolutely brilliant. I cannot wait for more. Ok, I can, but that\'s because the anticipation only makes it that much better. I especially loved the end of the second chapter... Those silly randy chess pieces. And Moaning Myrtle, that cracked me up. There\'s just so much I loved about this I could sit here and recite the entire two chapters and add one of my own by pointing out everything I liked. Sorry that I have nothing really constructive to say. I am a big fan of the constructive review.

Ack...you tease!

This is a chapter with so many good points, I fear this could become a long, gushy type review, so I\'ll just try to contain myself.

The anger, embarrassment, rejection and general snark are well in evidence in Severus. You write him so well and perhaps that\'s just an observation from someone who sees him in the same light...I\'m not sure.

The tension and pathos of Severus stripped of his secrets is the pivot for the whole chapter and what a chapter.

I love the way you dis-assemble the bad boy image; the general dig at the idea that whilst bad boys attract us, not many stay the distance in the relationship stakes. It\'s poignant, tense and true and just opens the way for the more intimate conversation to follow.

The idea of Moaning Myrtle is a delicious witticism thrown in to stop the whole chapter from descending into more maudlin territory and given the extreme intimacy you\'ve managed to create, it works very, very, well.

Loved the idea of Ron Weasley unable to function with his fly done up and it\'s another of those instances where I paint him the same way. (Great minds and all that).

The chess pieces are wonderful and so well described that not only can I see Albus\' admonishment of the king, but also the tennis rally swivel as the conversation heats up.

I\'ve always thought that the most telling sign of a good writer, versus a so-so writer, was their ability to draw the reader in so completely, that they felt like a voyeur caught in the middle of something they shouldn\'t be seeing or hearing. It gives you all the more kudor inr inviting Hermione into that position at thginnginning of the chapter.

You are a dreadful tease though and as cliffhangers go - it\'s a scream in frustration rating. I do hope you\'ll update this soon, but in any case I\'ll be back for more...

This is a very interesting idea and I can\'t wait for the good stuff. ^_~

But .........

Please explain how to have sex with a non-corporeal ghost.

Glinda

Lovely. A very nice continuation of an interesting start. I look forward to more!

OOOOOOHHHHHHHH!!!!! Hermine\'s confidence in her answer bordered almost on agression...Hmmmm aggressive Hermione+virgin Snape *licks lips in anticipation*... can NOT wait to see the outcome of THAT.

WANT. MORE .NOW... read some of your other work,,, love it all!

Shem