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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
U made me cry, you know that??? Hang on.....tissues.......right.......okay, i\'m back! Gr8 new chapter, really sensitive, well done! Update so.i l.i like sensitive Snape, btw!
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhh...how cute:P I like it i like it:P *Wipes a tear*
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
How very, very sweet. I love the idea of sharing her memories to make him feel more human.
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
So good, SO GOOD! Keep it coming!
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
There are creatures in this world that live solely on tears, on the pain and destruction of others. For the first time in his life Severus Snape realizes that he is not one of those creatures.
Oh...I think that last paragraph is the best I have read anywhere in Snape\'s realization of what he wasnt. Simply fantastic work.
Thank you
Red
Oh...I think that last paragraph is the best I have read anywhere in Snape\'s realization of what he wasnt. Simply fantastic work.
Thank you
Red
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
The are moments in this story that are really quite beautiful. The story itself is interesting and am curious as to where you are going with it. I can feel your inexperi in in some of the phrasing you use, there is a hesitancy in it, then you surge ahead and say something profound. The flashbacks were handled well and the last paragraph was art. I think that after you have gotten the whole story out editing will solve every other problem, because they are minor and do not hide your genuine talent for writing. Keep going!
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
A very powerful chapter.
Kiri
Kiri
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October 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This was a great chapter. Very moving. I can\'t even say more.
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October 5, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hi
You have reviewed my story (Objects of Desire) a few times so I thought it only fair to read and review yours. It\'s great! I have always loved HG/SS stories that have them get together because of some kind of magical mishap (I love love potion stories...sad but true) and I can barely wait to see what happens next. I love seeing a really dark Snape, I always liked the tortured soul for him and I love the concept of the flowers. Have you based the lillies on read flowers? Don\'t worry about the short chapters. I write great big long ones and I am seemingly incapable of writing shorter ones and I wish that i could because it takes me around three weeks to update, even if I work solidly on it the whole time. I like the short chapters, it keeps the story pacey. Are you going to give Draco anyone? And it is a shame you had to kill Lucius off (I only say this because Lucius, Draco and Snape are my favourites, not that you would know it given what I am doing to Lucius in my own fic).
Keep up the good work and I will keep checking for update
Az
Azrael
You have reviewed my story (Objects of Desire) a few times so I thought it only fair to read and review yours. It\'s great! I have always loved HG/SS stories that have them get together because of some kind of magical mishap (I love love potion stories...sad but true) and I can barely wait to see what happens next. I love seeing a really dark Snape, I always liked the tortured soul for him and I love the concept of the flowers. Have you based the lillies on read flowers? Don\'t worry about the short chapters. I write great big long ones and I am seemingly incapable of writing shorter ones and I wish that i could because it takes me around three weeks to update, even if I work solidly on it the whole time. I like the short chapters, it keeps the story pacey. Are you going to give Draco anyone? And it is a shame you had to kill Lucius off (I only say this because Lucius, Draco and Snape are my favourites, not that you would know it given what I am doing to Lucius in my own fic).
Keep up the good work and I will keep checking for update
Az
Azrael
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October 2, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Great story. I can\'t wait to find out what happened between Hermione and Severus. I hope you will update again soon.